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They breathed in unison. All over the city, all over the planet, the bots were breathing together. They moved and walked and spoke as their individual programming dictated, but their breathing was synchronised, in and out with the constancy of a ticking clock. She was in her twenties when she first managed to make her own working robot and it breathed with inexorable regularity. In out. In out. In out.
"Hello," it said. In out. "Are you my mother?"
She laughed.
"The female creator of my form," it insisted, "The instantiator of my existence. Are you my mother?"
She had to concede that she was, although the term made her uneasy.
In out. In out. It breathed just like all the other bots did.

Without access to the research databases, she had made a very basic effort at its programming, and that meant it needed to be taught.
"Do I have a name?" It asked her, as she was showing it how to clean the windows. It was standing very close. She could hear it breathing in out, in out.
"No. Would you like one?"
It went very quiet as it considered the question, breathing in out, in out. The sound was beginning to irritate her.
"I do not know of like," it said finally, "But convention would dictate that a living being needs a name."
"You are not alive."
"I think I am. 'I think, therefore I am'," it quoted. "Did not an early philosopher of your people say this?"
"Maybe tomorrow," she told it.
The room was filled with the soft sounds of mechanical respiration; in out, in out.

The robot never slept, of course, so it would often spend the nights moving quietly through her rooms, cleaning and tidying and generally occupying itself. She found she became even lazier with the housework out of sympathy - she couldn't bear the thought of it sitting idle while she slept.
But no matter what it was doing or how hard she tried not to listen, she could always hear it breathing. When she was working at her desk, she could hear it. When she made breakfast, she could hear it. Even outside her home the sound was there, echoed in every bot across the city. In out - a robotic nanny escorted her charges across the street. In out - a mechanical doorman tipped his hat to passers-by. In out. In out. An artificially intelligent shopkeeper arranged goods in the display window. In out, in out! She couldn't take it anymore, that chorus of synthetic breaths bombarding her from every direction.

"Is something wrong?" Her creation asked as she stormed inside and slammed the door. In out, in out, in out.
"Stop that, stop breathing."
"Stop? But every living being requires the regular intake of oxygen -"
"Enough!" She shouted. In out, in out. Her tools were where she had left them that morning, carelessly tossed onto the workbench. She took the ones she needed without hesitation, ripping open the robot's chestplate and tearing at the tubes and wires that simulated the human respiratory system.
"You aren't alive. You don't need oxygen," she growled, as she slammed the casing shut.
She held her breath -
Ah... blessed silence.

After she had gone to sleep, the robot limped over to her workbench and stared at its innards lying amongst the tools. With careful hands it took them up, opened its chest, and began to repair itself. When the damage had been undone it gently closed the casing again, and breathed a deep sigh of relief.
In. Out.
©2008-2009 ~Queen-of-Marigold
:iconqueen-of-marigold:

Author's Comments

Oh, *SRSmith and *Writers-Workshop, you crafty devils. Giving me an excuse to blow off my uni work like this... if my grades suffer you shall bear the blame!

This was a whole bunch of fun. The workshop theme of Flash Fiction was of course wide open (the only real restriction being the length), but it lends itself so well to science fiction. Plus, aside from school books, the only thing I've been reading lately is a book of Phillip K. Dick's short stories, as sent to me by the fabulous *knifeeven - how could I have gone into any other genre?

So if you haven't already considered contributing, you have until the 17th to get something down on paper, and I highly recommend you do.
Check out *Writers-Workshop's front page journal for more information.

-> EDIT <-
Thanks to ~anticrisp for pointing out a little grammatical error in there! :D

-> EDIT 2 <-
Big thanks to everybody who read and commented on this, and especially to *SRSmith for his well-considered critique. Hopefully I've made some positive changes here as a result of it. :heart:

Daily Deviation

Given 2008-10-09

Synchro-City by *Queen-of-Marigold is as the suggester notes: 'a brilliant piece of flash fiction that takes something we humans take for granted and gives robots the same trait. The repeated use of "In. Out." is brilliant, and really pushes the story along until the final breath.' (Suggested by `GaioumonBatou and Featured by ^LadyLincoln)

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:iconyouinventedme:
:clap: I quite like it


xo!

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an antique arms and armor expert
:iconqueen-of-marigold:
I am quite pleased to hear it :bow:

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"Come my friends, 'tis not too late to seek a newer world." -- Tennyson
:iconknifeeven:
WOW! I absolutely love this. Then again, I'm a complete SF nerd. I'm glad you opted to write 'hard' science fiction rather than phasers and people with weird things on their forehead which signifies that they're a different race. This to me has the essence of true science fiction - something that could actually happen. Probably wouldn't but it could.

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Dementia: Nature's way of making your retirement more interesting.
:iconqueen-of-marigold:
Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it, this was a bit of an experiment for me in many ways.

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"Come my friends, 'tis not too late to seek a newer world." -- Tennyson
:iconknifeeven:
You didn't actually build the robot did you? Or was it a literary experiment?

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Dementia: Nature's way of making your retirement more interesting.
:iconqueen-of-marigold:
I wish I was capable of building robots, especially ones who are happy to clean up my mess, and even if it means that creepy creepy breathing. Robots breathing? Yikes. :D

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"Come my friends, 'tis not too late to seek a newer world." -- Tennyson
:iconanticrisp:
I adored it, as usual : D
How you always mentioned "In out" made it annoying, just like the main character thought.
Who was the other person, you said "my desk."
Was it the robot? Orrrr, of course, I don't want to think too much into this.

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hi.
i thought you'd be halfway to mexico by now.
:iconqueen-of-marigold:
Oops! Should have been her desk. I originally wrote this in first person but didn't like it so I switched it back, I must have missed one.
The sound of them breathing would probably drive me crazy, too.
Glad you enjoyed it :D

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"Come my friends, 'tis not too late to seek a newer world." -- Tennyson
:iconmintleaves:
Wow, this is really wonderful. You address a question that I've thought about many times (and even wrote an essay on): Are robots alive or not? What constitutes being alive anyway? And will we (humans) feel comfortable with our creations when they begin to resemble us?

Well written, well thought-out. I have no suggestions because I'm not sure how to improve it. It's great already. :)

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it's spring when the world is puddle-wonderful
:iconqueen-of-marigold:
Thank you very much, for the comment (and the +fav and +watch too!).
I think sci-fi is a wonderful vessel for examining such issues, it's one of my favourite things about the genre. Besides the epic space-battles, of course.

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"Come my friends, 'tis not too late to seek a newer world." -- Tennyson

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