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Siren's Song by ~Queen-of-Marigold:iconQueen-of-Marigold:

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I slipped on soft feet to the silver-lit stream where the siren lay waiting, escaped from my dream.
"I'm sleepless with sorrow," she sang with a sigh, submitting her sins to the stars in the sky,
"Oh the secrets I've shared I should never have told, and the songs I've forgotten, the lies I have sold
Oh seducing lost sailors for pleasure or gold
Oh slitting their throats, oh their corpses so cold...
So the scars on my skin are a slight price indeed, hardly fair compensation for malice and greed
Have sympathy for me," she begged as she stood, this seaweed-nymph so out of place in the wood.
Then she shrugged and she sighed, and turned to flee
Back to sun-whitened sands that kiss up to the sea
Without even so much as a glance back at me.
©2008-2010 ~Queen-of-Marigold
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Author's Comments

Siren's Song: A Study of Sound

Not really a study. It just sounded good, since I tried to use 's' sounds as the focus of it... Um... You can probably tell how I struggled with the ending, I kinda ran out of 's' words. Oh well. That's why I don't do poetry :D

Also, since I don't do poetry, I have no idea which category this should be in. Oops.

For `SparrowSong's Sound Devices *Writers-Workshop workshop.

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`YouInventedMe Sep 2, 2008, 1:02:47 AM
wonderful flow


xo!

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~Queen-of-Marigold Sep 2, 2008, 1:03:57 AM
That was quick!
Thank you :)

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"Come my friends, 'tis not too late to seek a newer world." -- Tennyson
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~Katieyangg Sep 2, 2008, 9:05:38 AM
i really like this piece!
i likehow even in a few sentences you build the sirens story and some emotion -guilt etc
think the the 's' sounds work, it reminds me of wind whistling and snapping on twigs in the wood and maybe the whipser of her voice.. i love!!
i especially enjoyed the last line, it seems sort of wistful, and a big surprised at the abrupt ending (like the reader is!)
very nice :)
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~Queen-of-Marigold Sep 2, 2008, 2:05:35 PM
Well thank you! Isn't it awesome what deliberate manipulation of sound can do?
I'm glad you enjoyed it :D

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"Come my friends, 'tis not too late to seek a newer world." -- Tennyson
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~anticrisp Sep 2, 2008, 7:17:00 PM
I agree with the first comment: Wonderful flow.

And it makes me want to sing with her, haha.
It just seems like an old nursery rhyme to me I will always remember, it just sticks.

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~SlackJawedMoron Sep 2, 2008, 10:24:50 PM
I didn't like 'oh their corpses so cold', but yeah, the first part sounded wonderful...

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Tastes like the real thing... Sprite.
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~Queen-of-Marigold Sep 3, 2008, 12:59:43 AM
Thank you :)

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"Come my friends, 'tis not too late to seek a newer world." -- Tennyson
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~Queen-of-Marigold Sep 3, 2008, 1:02:02 AM
Aww thank you!
Don't sing with her! You can only do that if you're a cold-blooded killer masquerading as a tortured angel... :P
I'm glad you liked it... means I still have my hold over you! Mwahahahaha!

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"Come my friends, 'tis not too late to seek a newer world." -- Tennyson
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~knifeeven Sep 3, 2008, 8:22:39 PM
Beautiful. I've always loved Greek mythology, this is a wonderful piece. :D

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Dementia: Nature's way of making your retirement more interesting.
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